Welcome to The Querying Show’s Third Episode!
For the next six months you will witness every juicy (or completely stagnant) detail of our SP Staff Member’s querying life in the SLUSH PILE!
(Check out our rules and reasons in our intro post here!)
Will CR’s/Write_Or_Left achieve AGENT success? Or will it result with a querying and MS reboot? Dying to know? Follow us to see how Write_Or_Left ‘s querying journey will end up!
***Please forgive our late post. Autumn colds took over last week!
SO…..Today is the 3rd week of CR’s journey. Today we will do something a bit different. We will SHOW YOU CR’S QUERY and ask YOU for feedback!
But first, let’s check in our with brave querying fellow and see how things are progressing. (Click below for Episode 1 & 2.)
SP: Ciao CR/Write_Or_Left. As always, lets start with the STATS. How many more queries have you sent out?
CR/Write_Or_Left: Just one rejection, and no requests. The rejection was a good ol’ copy-paste (the email itself said as much).
SP: Be honest, are you:
A) Twitter stalking the agents you queried?
B) Checking your inbox regularly?
C) Totally Chill and got this?
D) Other exciting or emotional thoughts? (Do tell.)
E) All of the above?
CR/Write_Or_Left : I check my inbox pretty regularly, and I research agents before querying. But for the most part, I’m surprisingly calm about everything. I think it’s mostly because I really have no expectations except that I will get rejected. Therefore no rejection is all that painful, and all positive feedback is a welcome surprise! I think that’s given me a thicker skin for this process.
I’m also working on an additional project that I’m pretty excited about, so if this whole thing flops, I’ll have learned invaluable lessons that will help me in that project!
SP: OK, so for Today’s show, we wanted AUDIENCE feedback on CR’s Query. Your advice just may help him get a request!
What do you like about it?
What don’t you like about it?
Would you request it?
What can be improved?
Any other helpful tips?
Rules: Add your thoughts in the comments below. NO slamming! Please be kind while critiquing–all critiques must be helpful.
Dear “Awesome Agent,”
(Insert Personal Greeting and Necessary Genre, word count, Comp title info–or something of the sort! FYI, this is MG fantasy.)
12-year-old outlier Evander Ross knows there’s something special about the book his Grandpa tried to destroy. But he never would have guessed it would almost get him killed. Three times.
Despite his mother and grandfather’s efforts to shield the truth, Evander accidentally discovers traces of a strange world in one of his family’s many “forbidden” zones in the city. The Gifted World is everything Evan has dreamed of—a place full of strange creatures and new abilities, but also great danger. Within it, Evan nearly dies at the hand of Katerina, one of the Gifted World’s most wanted criminals; he finds Lumen’s Middle-High—a school that finally understands him; and he’s taken by authorities who tell Evan that he will never be accepted in the Gifted World—that his family was banished long ago.
Evan is now eager not only to discover his family’s true past but also to find his way back and prove the Marshals are wrong about him. So when Evander learns that Katerina plans to attack Lumen’s Mid-High, he takes his chance. But no one believes him. Now he might be the only one that can stop her threat. And if he doesn’t, Lumen’s and everyone in it might be completely destroyed.
(End with BIO and other useful info like social media and contact info)
Thank you for your time and consideration.
SP: Our Querying Tip of the Week:
WHILE you are querying KEEP writing on either your WIP or a new project; Get more readers to review your work–have an open mind; Get involved with other writers and read their work too! And DON’T stress it! All good things take time.
Since we have posted late, we will NOT post a show this Friday.
Also, during November and December, we will only have 2 Querying shows per month due to extra holiday busyness and school exams! Thanks for understanding! *If something exciting does occur, we will be sure to let you know!
Nova and CR/Write_Or_Left signing off! Have a GREAT weekend!!!
4 thoughts on “The Querying Show, Episode 3. Gently Rip Apart His Query, Please.”
A site that is helping me (the way SEAL boot camp help Navy SEALs) is Query Shark. She tells you to read ALL her archives befor even submitting. I’ve been at it for days and I’m in 2012! But I’m learning a ton. She would say to cut out every single unnecessary word (you’d be amazed at how many she finds) and to read it aloud. Best to you!